At nearby Green Mountain College, which has more business courses and more job counselors than does Mira Vista College, 90 percent of last year’s graduating seniors had job offers from prospective employers. But at Mira Vista College last year, only 70 percent of the seniors who informed the placement office that they would be seeking employment had found full-time jobs within three months after graduation, and only half of these graduates were employed in their major field of study. To help Mira Vista’s graduates find employment, we must offer more courses in business and computer technology and hire additional job counselors to help students with their resumes and interviewing skills. (misinterpreted statistics)

In this memo, the author concludes that Mira Vista College should offer more courses in business and computer technology and hire additional job counselors to help students with their resumes and interviewing skills so that students of Mira Vista College could be employed more after graduation. To support the conclusion, the author refer to Green Mountain College which has more business courses and more job counselors than does Mira Vista College, and where there are 90 percent of last year’s graduating seniors had job offers from prospective employers. However, I do not find the conclusion well reasoned. Here are some reasons.

First of all, Mira Vista College and Green Mountain may be specializing in different fields; different colleges might have different advantages. No matter what kind of field the college specialized, there are inherently some schools favored by most companies. For example, students of the business schools are more welcomed by companies than those majored in music in school because the demand for most companies mainly contributed to the employment rate. Only comparing the rate of employment between Mira Vista College and Green Mountain College might be irrelevant.

In addition, the reasons for the increase in the students’ employed rates could have been anything from a significant motivation of students’ studying, the improved qualities of students’ performance to the general market conditions conductive to the upward employed rates in students’ future development. To make this claim more convincing, the author should provide a reliable study proving that the increased employed rate can be linked to the additional job counselors to help students with their resumes and interviewing skills.

In conclusion, without the direct correlation between the job counselors and the increased employed rate, Green Mountain would be foolish to implement such a plan. Even if job counselors do help increase the employed rate, the author should not compare the employed rate between Mira Vista College and Green Mountain because certain schools majored in certain fields, by nature, will have higher employed rate. Evidently, faulty analogy and oversimplification make the argument unsound.